Question

Could someone please help me check this persuasive text and give me some ideas on how to improve?

Answer 1

1) 90% human body is made up of water.
2) Greatly doesn't seem as good a word in place, try referring a thesaurus, I hope you'd find a better word.
3) Water isn't nutritious. It's the basic requirement of fluids. I trust you'd look over some functions of water, or try to find out why water is needed by the human body. I'm sure well researched information ought to be better.
4) You can give an example of how water is the most used solvent in industries. Perhaps a line or two.

I entrust you proofread your work twice or thrice to improve it's quality.

Answer 2

Thanks @neetziD