Are these good sentences?

1. The defendant claimed defamation against the plaintiff because he did not have concrete evidence to back up his accusations.

2. The professional hunter used his rifle and aimed at his quarry, but lost focus at the last second and missed.

Question

Are these good sentences?

1. The defendant claimed defamation against the plaintiff because he did not have concrete evidence to back up his accusations. 

2. The professional hunter used his rifle and aimed at his quarry, but lost focus at the last second and missed.

snuggielad · Answer

1. its fine...
2. i would replace the first "and" with "that he"...you don't want two and in one sentence...

stamp · Answer

The defendant claimed defamation against the plaintiff because he did not have concrete evidence to back up his accusations. 

The defendant claimed defamation against the plaintiff for not having concrete evidence to back up his accusations.

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The professional hunter used his rifle and aimed at his quarry, but lost focus at the last second and missed.

The professional hunter aimed his rifle at his quarry, but at the last second he lost focus and missed.

anonymous · Answer

Thank you both for your help!