a song i'm working on...

boy, you've got, just what i need, you're my sunlight on a dark, day. you smile, i look away, my face, turns a shade, of red. that smile, is what i love, it takes my breath away, every time.

it's a love song-ish type, typical.

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a song i'm working on... 

boy, you've got, just what i need, you're my sunlight on a dark, day. you smile, i look away, my face, turns a shade, of red. that smile, is what i love, it takes my breath away, every time. 

it's a love song-ish type, typical.

anonymous · Answer

its really good :)

anonymous · Answer

i'll post a video of me singing it when i finish it, if i finish it.

anonymous · Answer

but thanks!

anonymous · Answer

np :)

notamathgenius · Answer

Nothing really needs to be done to it :) it's perfect :D good job!!!

anonymous · Answer

kellin!

anonymous · Answer

well, the only line i reeeeeally like, is "you smile, i turn away, my face turns a shade of red." i kinda want to change the rest.

notamathgenius · Answer

Why it sounds amazing, it rhymes :) it has good scheme to it :) like a poem :D i think nothing needs to change tbh :D

anonymous · Answer

@Umar97 @TSwizzle @dmezzullo

anonymous · Answer

THIS IS AMAZING ^.^

anonymous · Answer

@calah , thanks!

anonymous · Answer

Awesome :D

anonymous · Answer

"there's so many stars in the sky, but no two, shine like your eyes, whoaa, who-aa." i want to put that in there somewhere.

aravindg · Answer

How about "East or west ? I am the best !"

anonymous · Answer

maybe, i'll put it in there somewhere. i have to figure out the music to go along with it. :o

aravindg · Answer

lol ..just joking ..Nice work :)

anonymous · Answer

you need a beat?

anonymous · Answer

yeah, i'm looking for something slow and kinda relaxed but modern. @Cleavland*Kidd

anonymous · Answer

msg me

anonymous · Answer

"from east to west, no doubt we shine the best." @AravindG , i changed it up a bit, but i'm gonna use it.