I haven't written in a while so please tell me how it sounds, Thanks :

Why ? Why do things happen ? Why are things in life so complicated ? Why are things that are so precious to us get taken away in a matter of time ? Life, family, friends, love ones, pets, opportunities, and what not. Why is our world filled with horrid acts of corruption in our soceity ? Why do people do the things that they do ? Hurt, kill, molest, kidnapp, gossip, and more. Why ? That is the question, the main question to be.. Why ?

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I haven't written in a while so please tell me how it sounds, Thanks :

 Why ? Why do things happen ? Why are things in life so complicated ? Why are things that are so precious to us get taken away in a matter of time ? Life, family, friends, love ones, pets, opportunities, and what not. Why is our world filled with horrid acts of corruption in our soceity ? Why do people do the things that they do ? Hurt, kill, molest, kidnapp, gossip, and more. Why ? That is the question, the main question to be.. Why ?

anonymous · Answer

It's "loved ones." I would take out "what not" because the tone of the passage turns from serious to somewhat informal. Actually, I would fix it like this: Why is life so complicated? Why are the most precious parts of life, the parts that make it worthwhile, get taken away? Why is our society filled with horrid acts of corruption? Why do people do the things that they do? Hurt, kill, molest, gossip, and even more horrid acts. Why? That is the question to be answered... But why?

anonymous · Answer

Also, are you going to specifically answer the questions later on in your paper? If you aren't, then I would tone done on the question asking. It does give it a dramatic vibe though and I'm assuming that you are going to write about something personal that has happened.

anonymous · Answer

Maybe she was writing it in poetry form, which technically would mean she didn't have to answer them because they're meant to make you wonder.

anonymous · Answer

I was writing in poetry form. Thank you for noticing. (: @chaylacryder

anonymous · Answer

No prob, it really wasn't that hard to see. Well, I guess for some people it is. :)

anonymous · Answer

Yeah :) I don't write much. I speak my mind more than I write.

anonymous · Answer

That's good, that's better then keeping to yourself all your feelings. :)

anonymous · Answer

Oops, mah bad! Sorry, I was stuck on the "scholarly paper" mindset on that one :p

anonymous · Answer

Scholarly paper mindset?? Good luck with that. You were just trying to help, which I'm sure means you don't have to apologize to her. Don't take my word for it.