Question

I need help correcting this paper

Answer 1

here is the paper

Answer 2

Nice paper. I don't see any spelling, grammar errors...

Answer 3

I was told that there are run ons and the conventions need fixing but i have looked at this paper so much i do not notice it

Answer 4

Gaw My worst mistakes too. XD;

Answer 5

I know i really hate the mistakes. I can't wait to be done with this paper

Answer 6

this seems to have very long sentence "Due to the amount of broken doors there are lines forming in the restrooms because of the lines for the working stall doors the toilet paper runs out causing the users to use the broken stalls."

Let's find a way to shorten it a bit.

Answer 7

Due to the amount of broken stall doors there are lines forming for the working stalls. This causes the working stalls to run out of toilet paper which then has the users to use the broken stalls.

Answer 8

the last sentence does not work so ignore that and i think it is good

Answer 9

Ok how about this one "Although the school has staff that patrols the hallways the school also needs a security guard on standby just in case the next wandering person is not homeless and means to cause harm to the students."
seem long as well.

Answer 10

keep the security guards and cut out the school patrol staff

Answer 11

Awesome No more run
ons.

Answer 12

thanks

Answer 13

oh is there anything else that looks like it needs fixing?

Answer 14

Hmm, What is conventions mean in your writing class?

Answer 15

i have no idea although my teacher did say it was the commas and periods

Answer 16

"This, in turn, can help people afford the things they need to get by."
Seems odd.

Answer 17

"How the building is set up can have a great influence on how the students do with their learning. "
Needs to have a ? mark in there.

Answer 18

thanks for the help but i need to go, my study period is over

Answer 19

good luck ;)