Question

is my love poem good?

Answer 1

I think of you all day long, and try to go to sleep,
O do not try
To break down and cry
but I let it out and weep

I miss the short time when I would see you everyday
I miss the fun
But hate that it's done
It's a price I cannot pay

I dream about you every night, I can't get you out my head
You're beauty is wealthy
But I am unhealthy
I lay chocked up and silent in bed

I miss the time that we would talk and also laugh together
But soon enough
The candle was snuffed
I wish it could last forever

As I think of your name and your pretty face, theirs something g that I'll bet,
You can count on me
It's a garuntee
You're someone I'll never forget

I dream of the time I may see you a bit more
I must insist
There's an endless list
Of things about you I adore

As a short time passed by, you captivated me
I must confess
That happiness
Ain't the same without your company

I have great feelings for you, you may not know exist
I don't know what to do
Besides think of you
For your the one I miss

I like the way you are, simply magnificent
What I want to show
I badly want you to know
Is that my love for you is infinite

When you pass by I stand still silent and gazed
I'd walk for miles
Just to see your smile
By you I am amazed

Everything about you sings out like an angel choir
Your kind mentality
Your personality
You're all that I desire

Think of anything you want
Say it, than I'll do
For there is no one in the world
More special to me than you

Answer 2

it doesn't flow

Answer 3

thanks for tip man! @nincompoop

Answer 4

I dont get it?

Answer 5

It's not flowing like the poems should go and it's not giving a message. Other than that, the lines are good.