Question

Please help! I'll fan & medal if you do. I just need this revised.

Answer 1

Fortunately, her step mother cared so deeply for Cinderella’s future that she carefully prepared her for every eventuality. Even though they may be princesses, modern girls need to be aware of the dangers as well as the expectations the world has for them. Castle-cleaning might not be every girl’s idea of a great way to spend a Saturday afternoon; however, practical skills like that enhance any princess’s public relations. Just because you are a princess, doesn’t mean you’ll ever be a queen.

Answer 2

The teacher said it didn't flow well and it needs more transition words

Answer 3

Fortunately, Cinderella's step mother cared so deeply for her step-daughter’s future that she authoritatively prepared her for a typical, second rate ever after. Even though (Who are they? List names) they may be princesses, modern girls need to be aware of the dangers as well as the expectations the world has for them. (List female jobs and what intentions society have planned for every day women) Castle-cleaning might not be every girl’s idea of a great way to spend a Saturday afternoon. I'm sure the exquisite glamor and superiority is much more appealing for any person. However, practical skills like castel-cleaning enhance any princess’s public relations. Just because you are a princess, doesn’t mean you’ll ever be a queen.

Answer 4

Thanks! i'll look your version over and submit it :)

Answer 5

Look over*

Answer 6

You're welcome and good luck! Just explain your theory more and I guarantee you'll get an A :)