Question

Essay:any topic

Answer 1

@e.cociuba

Answer 2

Okay, have you figured a topic out that you want to do your essay on? I gave you quite a long time to brainstorm :)

Answer 3

i sent you couple messages did you read them

Answer 4

Nope. I erased them. Opps.

Answer 5

The food i like food i don't like

Answer 6

witch one you suggest whats your ideas?

Answer 7

im out of topics lol

Answer 8

umm i wish i did only with mask with out air for couple seconds

Answer 9

Okay how about on a roller coaster?

Answer 10

yeah many times in oaks park

Answer 11

Okay so let's talk about that. I'll start it off.

Answer 12

that park has many attractions

Answer 13

like screaming eagle big swing goes up to sky very high

Answer 14

The line was very long, but it was finally my turn. I took a seat in the cart and buckled up, filled with anxiety and adrenaline at the same time. My heart beat faster and faster as the instructor counted down "five, four, three.....". I squeezed my eyes tightly closed, "ONE"! The cart launched forward, throwing me against the back of the seat. In agony, I grabbed the belt holding me to the cart, as the cart moved upward on the track.

Answer 15

Can you take it from here?

Answer 16

that's starting?

Answer 17

You don't like it? Okay how about you start it this time and see what you come up with :) Go on.

Answer 18

i like it i just asked is that starting?

Answer 19

Sure. Your supposedly starting to go up on the roller coaster.

Answer 20

it could be (One day me and my family went to oaks park........i told to my brother i will go on roller coaster.But the line was their so big.....

Answer 21

then your continues?

Answer 22

Okay, you start your's. I have to go. I will be back in 30 minutes. I expect to see you have started on your essay, understood? lol :) And yes continue, but watch out for those mistakes.

Answer 23

One day me and my family went to oaks park.I told to my brother that i will go to roller coaster.When we came,we bought bracelets.The line was very long, but it was finally my turn. I took a seat in the cart and buckled up, filled with anxiety and adrenaline at the same time. My heart beat faster and faster as the instructor counted down "five, four, three.....". I squeezed my eyes tightly closed, "ONE"! The cart launched forward, throwing me against the back of the seat. In agony, I grabbed the belt holding me to the cart, as the cart moved upward on the track.When cart was very top every one started screaming,it went down and high speed i feel like my soul going out of my body...

Answer 24

i will continue tomorrow i have to go or if you can do it :)

Answer 25

It was a beautiful day, when my family and I decided to go to Oaks Park. I told my brother that I would go on a roller coaster. When we got to the ride, we bought our bracelets.The line was very long, but it was finally my turn. I took a seat in the cart and buckled up filled with anxiety and adrenaline at the same time. My heart beat faster and faster as the instructor counted down "five, four, three.....". I squeezed my eyes tightly closed, "ONE"! The cart launched forward, throwing me against the back of the seat. In agony, I grabbed the belt holding me to the cart, as the cart moved upward on the track. When the cart reached the very top, every one started screaming in excitement. In a lurching and fast motion the cart sped downhill roaring in my ears. The chug on the tracks screamed in my ear as the cart rolled heavily on the metal.

Answer 26

That's better :) Now continue.

Answer 27

I tried not to sound to descriptive and at a lower "academic level" in english like you wanted lol

Answer 28

It was a beautiful day, when I and my brother decided to go to Oaks Park. I told my brother that I would go on a roller coaster. When we got to the ride, we bought our bracelets.The line was very long, but it was finally my turn. I took a seat in the cart and buckled up filled with anxiety and adrenaline at the same time. My heart beat faster and faster as the instructor counted down "five, four, three.....". I squeezed my eyes tightly closed, "ONE"! The cart launched forward, throwing me against the back of the seat. In agony, I grabbed the belt holding me to the cart, as the cart moved upward on the track. When the cart reached the very top, every one started screaming in excitement. In a lurching and fast motion the cart sped downhill roaring in my ears. The chug on the tracks screamed in my ear as the cart rolled heavily on the metal.After ride me and my brother went other attractions.After all rides me and my brother got to dizzy and ride back to home.I was great day.

Answer 29

fix if you will find any mistakes or add something to make sense

Answer 30

roller coaster and disco was my fave but after disco got to dizzy

Answer 31

so i fell bad everything i ate went out :s lol

Answer 32

did you every got that dizzy on attractions?

Answer 33

Corrected: After the amazing ride, my brother and I went to other attractions. After going on all the rides, my brother and I, got to dizzy and decided to head back home. It was a great day that will be unforgettable.

Answer 34

The visit to Oak Park
By: Max
It was a beautiful day, when I and my brother decided to go to Oaks Park. I told my brother that I would go on a roller coaster. When we got to the ride, we bought our bracelets.The line was very long, but it was finally my turn. I took a seat in the cart and buckled up filled with anxiety and adrenaline at the same time. My heart beat faster and faster as the instructor counted down "five, four, three.....". I squeezed my eyes tightly closed, "ONE"! The cart launched forward, throwing me against the back of the seat. In agony, I grabbed the belt holding me to the cart, as the cart moved upward on the track. When the cart reached the very top, every one started screaming in excitement. In a lurching and fast motion the cart sped downhill roaring in my ears. The chug on the tracks screamed in my ear as the cart rolled heavily on the metal. After the amazing ride, my brother and I went to other attractions. After going on all the rides, my brother and I, got to dizzy and decided to head back home. It was a great day that will be unforgettable.

Answer 35

How would you name this essay? (Trip to Attractions,Oaks park?)

Answer 36

e.coc you think is bad? lol i already sent to a teacher

Answer 37

i think its good if it be to good he will complain that not mine write

Answer 38

Ahh ok I see. It has to look like you did it and not someone else with a higher academic level in english.

Answer 39

But, anyways great job! :)

Answer 40

all thanks to you e.coc :)

Answer 41

you didnt answer did you got that dizzy so you fel bad?