Can someone tell me if my thesis statement is clear enough

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jagatuba · Answer

Site is acting buggy. you need to post your statement if you want someone to give you feedback.

anonymous · Answer

What does it mean to be successful in the business in the realm of business? Success is the accomplishment of one’s goals. Whether that person’s goals be beneficial to a group of others or to himself. Some people look at being successful as being very wealthy, but being wealthy has its positives and negatives. Others look at being successful as gaining the respect of your subordinates or other that work in your respective field. Successfulness has many forms and shapes, but its true feeling can only be attained inside the individual.

jagatuba · Answer

What level of writing are you doing?

anonymous · Answer

This is for my college business class

jagatuba · Answer

Okay. This looks more like your intro paragraph rather than your thesis statement. So which do you want help with?

anonymous · Answer

The thesis is the last sentence.

jagatuba · Answer

It's not very clear. A thesis statement should in one sentence tell me what I'm a bout to read. Somewhere in the sentence, I should be able to find one or more of your three main points in your paper. What are the points you will be discussing?

anonymous · Answer

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/588/01/ will help you understand and refine your thesis statement.