no one can save a lonely angel.
love is a lost thought.
made up for the hopeful people.
an endless curse if you ask me.
an end to the safety of empty corridors.
but no, you still cant see
why cant you see im trying to save you?
from the hurt and the pain...
this world wasn't meant for two.
can you see my empty eyes?
can you see im made for misery?
can you see through my bullpellet lies?
I cant take anymore.
ive tried to save you for the last time.
ive took more than i can endure.
and so I will end this rhyme

Question

no one can save a lonely angel.
love is a lost thought.
made up for the hopeful people.
an endless curse if you ask me.
an end to the safety of empty corridors.
but no, you still cant see
why cant you see im trying to save you?
from the hurt and the pain...
this world wasn't meant for two.
can you see my empty eyes?
can you see im made for misery?
can you see through my bullpellet lies?
I cant take anymore.
ive tried to save you for the last time.
ive took more than i can endure.
and so I will end this rhyme

wolfboy · Answer

Its good. :) It says alot Without alot of words. Thats a good thing, it makes it strong

demonickittenlover · Answer

thanks :) I try lol but I just feel it is missing something

wolfboy · Answer

Hmmmmmm Maybe a line where he explains like " i became this way to help people like you, until you all saw me through, then i noticed you didnt care, and thats true..... Idk just a tip

demonickittenlover · Answer

wow I think that was I was missing! thanks!

wolfboy · Answer

Lol np im glad to of helped