OpenStudy (anonymous):

can someone proofread my paper?

4 years ago
OpenStudy (anonymous):

Fresh To Death Reality hit me as I reached the endless hallway of death, summer was officially over. I thought that people would break out into songs like high school musical. However, all I saw were a group of overgrown green aliens who roamed the halls with no fear. I truly felt like us freshmans were the peasants of the schools while the upper classman were the wealthy kings. “Watch out Bella!” I shrieked to my friend as we dodged the gooey stuff that came from every direction. Preppy looking girls blew their whistles with a piercing noise that clogged my ears. We couldn’t even look ahead because giant towers blocked our view like brick walls. I was trapped. My breath was short and the smell of sweat swirled around the school. I could tell that high school wasn’t going to be a breeze. After all that madness, we finally approached the gym with our oversized soccer bags and placed them in our lockers. “Hey Toni and Bella!” Mr. Breschard greeted us with a warm smile. I was very relieved to see a familiar face from my elementary school. I wanted to just stay in the gym and hide from the world. However, adrenaline shot up my shoulder as I realized it was 7:50 and my homeroom started at 7:50. “RINGGG!” the bell of fear was awakened and I sprinted towards the hallway. This time there wasn’t a pool of 6 feet tall kids but just pure emptiness which made my heart drop to the floor. All I can hear was my conscious saying that I was screwed. “Toni I think we have history together, follow me!” A voice echoed from down the hall. I felt like a weight has been lifted off me and I began to follow my friend. We literally went in circles for 10 minutes until we saw heaven through the doors of a history classroom. However, with my luck my friend led me into the wrong classroom and I stood there looking like a typical freshman with a puzzled look. My head began to spin and I fiercely charged down the halls like a leopard and found a helpful looking women. “Hey do you know where room E185 is?” I asked politely “Oh just go downstairs and take a right.” “Thank you so much!” Many thoughts poured through my mind, “What if I missed the announcements? What if I missed a pretest? What if I missed the attendance? I then realized that someone on Facebook posted a map of the high school. I quickly popped up the map and managed my ways through the endless halls. Finally, I saw a sign that said E185 and my day just turned brighter. I casually walked in the classroom and took a seat next to someone I knew. I sat there in silence thinking about how my walk to history was like walking to New York to New Jersey. I was suddenly interrupted by a song that was by the Black Eyed Peas and my face glowed up as I saw my brother in the prom video on TV. I was very ecstatic for school to start until I saw my teachers serious glare. “OK class, take out your summer assignments!” Mr. Ippolito lectured Reality smacked me in the face again and I realized that High School isn’t paradise after all. I took out all my fresh materials and this was the start of a long road of heavy work and hell.

4 years ago
OpenStudy (anonymous):

It would be best if u proofread it. It is YOUR paper. U should know what typos are there.

4 years ago
OpenStudy (anonymous):

Freshmans- freshmen

4 years ago
OpenStudy (timaashorty):

I love proofreading, which is why I'm here, but I found nothing ;o (BUT maybe the 'freshmans' editing that Shei said. But I looked through and didn't find it.) I think this story sounds great, you could edit it by adding more details/descriptions, and big words if you want a 100% A and the readers to get really hooked. Otherwise, everything in my opinion is fine. (:

4 years ago
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