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I had to write an inductory paragraph to a narrative essay. My topic is: "What happened before the "Cask of Amontillado". If you could review my paragraph I'd really appreciate it. :D

Answer 1

Finally, the time has arrived. In one week, I will be marrying my beautiful fiance, Emilia with my dear friend Fortunado standing by my side as best man. We got engaged four months ago on a beautiful summer day in Emilia’s favorite place in my entire mansion, the garden.
“Emilia, darling , I must ask you a very important question.” I stated, with the obvious look of nervousness on my face.
“Yes, what is it?” she asked whilst smelling the sunflowers she planted some time ago.
“Well my dear, we’ve been together for some time now, and I love you more than anything in this world.” She giggled at my words and brushed a piece of blonde hair behind her left ear.
I smiled, then lightly grabbed her hand and pulled her around ever so slightly.
She had a look of confusion on her face, until I finally got down on one knee. Her blue eyes brightened like the morning sky when I did so.
“Emilia, will you marry me?”
“Yes! Yes, I will marry you my darling Montresor!” she exclaimed. I slipped the ring on her finger, then wrapped her in the biggest hug I had ever given anyone.
Now here we are, 4 months later, still happy as we were on that beautiful day. My once gloomy, dark, lonely mansion has now become lively, cheerful, and full of life. The only other person I’ve ever truly loved in my life is my dearest friend, Fortunado. He’s a tall man, with tan skin, brown eyes, and long black hair that he keeps in a pony tail most of the time. He always says the same thing when he sees Emilia and I together.
“Montresor, I’ve never seen you so happy in all the years I’ve known you.”
I suppose he is right, because I have never felt so happy and complete in my entire life. I have a beautiful fiance that I’m going to marry in 7 days, a best friend who cares for me dearly, and a wine company that has taken off to heights I’d never thought it would reach. My life is perfect. I am living any man’s dream at this point in my life.
No one can ruin my happiness, for I will not allow it. In fact, I will do anything necessary to maintain my happiness. One man tried to steal my happiness away once, but I stopped him dead in this tracks. That man is no longer able to tell the tale of his attempts to steal my happiness away, and its all because of me.

Answer 2

Very well written.