Question

hey guys. Im posting my essay i was talking about earlier. here it is without the conclusion though. I would really appreciate your feedback.

Answer 1

@DonaldRoyMiller here is my essay so far with no conclusion. I need help coming up with the conclusion. or at least starting it

Answer 2

I can't get it to open

Answer 3

uhhhhhh. i can email it to you? whats ur email?

Answer 4

How's this for a title. You definitely need to remove the article, the "The" before "Death."

The Tragedy of Ethan Frame: Death and Manipulation within a Love Story

Answer 5

Frome

Answer 6

Some time the character recognition doesn't work that well.

Answer 7

Anyway, you still there?

Answer 8

im still here. just pondering thoughts

Answer 9

I read your essay. You did good work. No question about that.

Answer 10

I must confess that I'm struggling with essay writing myself. (Like who isn't?) Essay writing is really though. It's very difficult to find one's own "voice." I haven't found mine yet.

Answer 11

tough not though, I meant.

Answer 12

true that. im just having a bit of trouble starting my conclusion. any ideas?

Answer 13

How much time do you have to do this?

Answer 14

its due tomorrow. i have been working on it all week

Answer 15

Okay. Well, I'll look it over and see what I can come up with.

Answer 16

thanks. als0 let me no how it looks to

Answer 17

I wish we had a lot more time to work on it. Can you get an extension?

Answer 18

I mean, what if you handed in what you have (along with the end-part you want to write) and asked if you could keep working on it?

Answer 19

it doesnt work that way in my class. I think through this talking i may have an idea for an ending. let me type it up then i will paste just the ending since u have the rest of the essay. But how does the essay look grammer wise?

Answer 20

It looks okay. Probably very good for tenth grade class. If we had more time, though, we could write a really killer essay with what you have here. Some sentences could be moved around and a few things tweaked. (Stuff any writer would need to do. So don't feel bad. It's good work!)

Answer 21

thanks so much. i hope for my next essay we can pull out a KILLER ESSAY. and fyi im in 11th grade. what grade r u in?

Answer 22

I'm not in school. I do independent studies. I wrote a couple of novellas by the way. So far only one person has bothered reading them.

Answer 23

can u send me a link for them? im may be interested. what are they about?. ALSO THANKS SO MUCH for the help. i really hope that we can stay and touch and be friends :)

Answer 24

Absolutely. I'm not one of these people who says he's going to do something and then doesn't.

Answer 25

I'll place them on the open scholar site.

Answer 26

awesome.

Answer 27

what college did u go to though?

Answer 28

I didn't finish college. Six years, right down the drain. :)

John Belushi, Animal House.

Answer 29

can u send me the link for ur forum again?

Answer 30

I'm thnking that maybe I'll do an essay on Ethan Frome. But maybe it would be better to do one on the next essay you have coming along. What's your next assignment?

Answer 31

honestly i have absolutely no idea. i will let u no as soon as i do.

Answer 32

Okay. Let me do as you asked and look for typos and grammar problems. How long do you have? It 10:45 pm where I live.

Answer 33

oh no i looked over for the 100th time. thanks so much. and im in the US

Answer 34

Me too. US

Answer 35

The second "In Ethan Frome" in the first paragraph should be cut. Also, remember what I said about the article in the title.

More to come. . .

Answer 36

ok. it was a pleasure working with u. and i did change the title. thanks for all of the help but i really gotta go. cya later

Answer 37

Hold on for a moment I have a question.

Answer 38

Do you want to keep working on this, even though you won't get (might not get) any credit for the work. I think it'd be a good learning experience.

Answer 39

what do you mean? i finished

Answer 40

You can be improved. If we work on improving this, it will help for future essay writing work.

Answer 41

It can be improved. I mean.

Answer 42

oh i understand that. and i get that it can be improved. and not to make excuses but i really dont have the time now and i honestly think what i have right now is good. and regardless everyone can always be improved. but definitely for the next essay we will go hardcore and make it a killer essay. I really appreciate all of your help though.

also can u send me a link for ur novellas?

Answer 43

I'll place them on the opencoursescholar site.

Answer 44

http://badlandsquadrilogy.wordpress.com/

Answer 45

You can find them there.

Answer 46

Check it out. I made that site from scratch.

Answer 47

well as i said. it was a pleasure working with u and i apologize about the time constraint. I cant wait to work with u on essays again soon. And i will try to read ur novellas they look interesting

Answer 48

I used the images from a movie to make my "Badlands" cover.

Answer 49

cool. i really have to go now. i hope we can talk some more at a later time?

Answer 50

Okay, Phill. Catcha later. It's been fun.

Answer 51

cya thanks again