Use temporal transitions to revise the following paragraph. You may need to create additional details or information. Use proper spelling and grammar.

Ashley wanted a puppy. He talked to his family for hours. They did not believe he had time to care for the puppy. Ashley created a puppy-care plan. His family finally agreed.

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Use temporal transitions to revise the following paragraph. You may need to create additional details or information. Use proper spelling and grammar.

Ashley wanted a puppy. He talked to his family for hours. They did not believe he had time to care for the puppy. Ashley created a puppy-care plan. His family finally agreed.

anonymous · Answer

Is this right? Ashley wanted a puppy. With regards to the puppy, he talked to his family for hours. Yes, hours! For the time being, they did not believe he had time to care for the puppy. So, Ashley created a puppy-care plan. At once, his family finally agreed!

anonymous · Answer

@e.mccormick can ya help me? ^_^ If it's okay :D

anonymous · Answer

I think its done right :) 
funny how the boy's name is Ashley xD

anonymous · Answer

@ShaeLoveth♥ oh dang, I JUST NOTICED DAT XD SHAE XD BAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHAAH XD

anonymous · Answer

lol :) thx for the medal :3 <3

anonymous · Answer

@ShaeLoveth♥ u deserved it XD DANG DAT WAS FUNNY XD

anonymous · Answer

lol |dw:1383081240940:dw|

anonymous · Answer

|dw:1383048888299:dw| thank u XD ttyl Shae :D XD