Question

Guys i have this assignment from The Scarlett Letter where i have to write a 139 word sentence. I can only use 2 semicolons. I hope that someone can help edit mine when im done in about 10-15 mins.

Answer 1

Guys i know that this is probably going to suck. I did not have all the time to put all of my thought and effort into this. So please dont criticize on the quality. please help with the grammer. @BulletWithButterflyWings @Mertsj

Answer 2

1. await
2. man's
I don't understand why you have crammed what should be several sentences into one sentence.

Answer 3

Well in the first instance that you use the three dashes, I'd use I'd replace with a period and start the next sentence with ''It is carrying the precious cargo''

Answer 4

the assignment @Mertsj is to write a 139 word sentence. A single sentence. thats the challengeing aspect to it.

Answer 5

quoted from my teacher:

"Using Hawthorne's sentence from "The Custom-House" as an example, construct a sentence of your own of 139 words. Rather than make a simple list, try to use subordinate and coordinate clauses and modifying phrases to extend your sentence."

Answer 6

It is 139 words.
The first set of dashes are not really needed..

The anticipation is building as I await the arrival of the small, dark grey, eco-friendly automobile carrying its precious cargo, man's best friend, who is wearing the color black with a small white dot;

Answer 7

is everything else okay though @phi

Answer 8

yes. My only quibble is that the second part sounds too much like a second sentence "glued" onto the first part. But I think it's ok.

Answer 9

ya i get what your saying but my assignment can only be one sentence. Thanks so much for the help @phi

Answer 10

I might try to tie the ideas together, like this (just an idea)

The anticipation is building as I await the arrival of the small, dark grey, eco-friendly automobile carrying its precious cargo, man's best friend, who is wearing the color black with a small white dot; and now the anticipation grows further as the wolf-faced pet approaches slowly to come and meet her possible owners at the doorstep