Can someone check/improve my thesis statement. "The contributions to the development of Los Angeles were mainly because of the Spanish, Mexicans, Indians, and Blacks.

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lena772 · Answer

The development of Los Angeles was made possible by the contributions of the Spanish, Indians, and African-Americans.

lena772 · Answer

Is your essay only about the contributions from these groups of people?

anonymous · Answer

Yes @Lena772. This is my prompt: "What were the contributions of the Spanish, Mexicans, Indians, and Blacks to the development of Los Angeles?"

lena772 · Answer

What are the main contributions these groups made?

lena772 · Answer

The ones you'll be focusing on in your essay.

anonymous · Answer

so far am still going to do some research base on these people

lena772 · Answer

You need to outline your paper first. For each paragraph pick the contribution you will focus on in the paragraph. When you have your contributions let me know.

anonymous · Answer

ok

anonymous · Answer

@Lena772 for each of my paragraph do I write about each group contribution

lena772 · Answer

If that's the way you want to go. :)

lena772 · Answer

The development of Los Angeles was made possible by the contributions of a few different groups of people, these are: the Spanish, the Indians, and the African-Americans.

lena772 · Answer

Close the question. :)