Question

Guys can someone please edit this sentence for me. IT HAS TO BE 139 WORDS (i have 139 words). My teacher says i have four independent clauses. CAN someone please help me fix this????? PLEASE

Answer 1

The anticipation is building as I await the arrival of the small, dark grey, eco-friendly automobile carrying its precious cargo, man's best friend, who is fashionably sporting the color black with a small white dot---the wolf-faced animal approaches slowly to come and meet her possible owners at the doorstep---filled with energy there is no stopping this year old beast from pushing her way through the crowd of people at the door to explore what may be her new home---the Strompf home, filled with space, love, support, and all the other basic necessities to welcome a new member into the family---the endless adventures my family and I will have with our new friend will be filled with plenty of good memories to enjoy for years to come and plenty to share with our friends and family.

Answer 2

@timo86m thanks. i hope you're able to help

Answer 3

@timo86m did it work this time?

Answer 4

oh sorry i wouldn't know this one :( i am more of a math guy.

Answer 5

@timo86m :(. can u help me find people whoa re good at english pleasE?

Answer 6

to the right is a list of people in this group :) one of them should be able to.

Answer 7

@bookworm00981

Answer 8

K, Im here. @cantthink96

Answer 9

Lets see what we have here...

Answer 10

that is one long sentence.

Answer 11

It sounds Good, I like what your aiming for, But your punctuation is simply Lacking. Also be careful with your use of these ---- ok?

Answer 12

okay so you need 1 independent clause/

Answer 13

i don't think i understand the question.

Answer 14

guys as stated in the instructions it has to be 139 words. and i mentioned whats wrong with it (words of my teacher). I really need help with it. is it possible that someone can hardcore edit it?

Answer 15

@cantthink96 the objective: write a 139 word SENTENCE. mine is bad, and i need help

Answer 16

okay but hovv exactly is it bad, doo you only need 1 clause?

Answer 17

Oh a sentence... Comma time!

Answer 18

You're going to vvvant to look through and try and seperate your sentences, you have more then one.

Answer 19

each ID clause can stand alone, meaning it is its ovvn sentence, seemingly vvhere you have the --- is nevv sentences

Answer 20

so in this you're going to vvant one subject

Answer 21

If it's to be one long sentence. Your going to be using lot's of commas my friend.

Answer 22

here is an example of a really long sentence vvith one clause


For a long time, but not any more, Japanese corporations used Southeast Asia merely as a cheap source of raw materials, as a place to dump outdated equipment and overstocked merchandise, and as a training ground for junior executives who needed minor league experience.
For a long time Japanese corporations used Southeast Asia merely as a cheap source of raw materials, as a place to dump outdated equipment and overstocked merchandise, and as a training ground for junior executives who needed minor league experience. But those days have ended.

Answer 23

posted it tvvice. sorry.

Answer 24

guys i dont want to be rude but what im asking is for you guys to help me fix my sentence, not make ones up. PLEASE. i really need help :P

Answer 25

thats the thing, vve really can't tell you hovv to do it vvithout doing it.

Answer 26

Yep, were not supposed to give direct answers. Why don't you copy it into a post and edit it.

Answer 27

im not asking for you to WRITE my sentence (i did that, that would be the direct answer). Im asking for help editing it please

Answer 28

Help edit it, i can tell you those ---'s are vvvhere you need to edit, i can't EDIT it for you, i can tell you you're going to need some conjunctions and moer commas

Answer 29

exactly what I said lol

Answer 30

not trying to be mean but this site is for people to get help. If you guys want to try and explain to me word for word what is wrong with my sentence, so i understand it fine. If you cant/dont want to do that fine

Answer 31

I can help lol, I just don't want to get in trouble lolz

Answer 32

I told you vvhats vvrong vvith your sentence. https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/609/04/ read here and https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/598/01/ here. this vvill give you information on vvhat exactly is vvrong vvith your sentence. around the --- you start a nevv sentence vvithout knovving it stating another independant clause, if you find that clause you can fix it.

Answer 33

link me to the docs lol

Answer 34

think of those --- as periods, and then revamp it to combine those sentences