Question

CAN SOMEONE HELP ME EDIT THIS PARAGRAPH MY TEACHERS SAID THIS: This paragraph lacks the required opening sentence. It does not have a summary and the thesis is incomplete, yet wordy.

Answer 1

Sedaris and Hugh are two ordinary 11 year old boys. Although they both have childlike characteristics, both live completely different lives. They have different customs in their lifestyle; there is a noticeable difference in their education, and they both experienced different childhoods.

Answer 2

try doing something like this:
Sedaris and Hugh are alike and different in many ways. They are alike in age and childlike characteristics. such as (list characteristics). They are also very different living contrasting lives. Having many different customs in their lifestyles such as (list some customs). Growing up with very different childhoods created a noticeable difference in their education. That is how Sederis and Hugh are alike and different.