Question

Invent dialogue and revise the following paragraph. Use proper spelling and grammar.

Ashley talked to his family for hours about how much he wanted a puppy. It took them forever, but they finally gave in.

Answer 1

Is this right?

Ashley talked to his family for hours about how much he wanted a puppy.

"I don't believe that you have time to care for a puppy right now." Said his mother.
"Your mother's right Ashley. You have a ton of work to do!" Said his father.
"You are so behind! Not only on your work, but in school too! The last thing you need is a puppy Ashley!" Shouted his brother.
"I promise to catch up on my work! I'll finish my homework and get back on pace!" Ashley cried. "I'll even do extra chores for a month if I must! I'll come up with a plan!"

Ashley's family thought and thought. It took them forever, but they finally gave in.

I'm confused Q_Q

Answer 2

Ashley sounds like a guys name, Just saying. It's correct but awkward at the same time.