The success of this video shows the popularity gained by him, like no other astronaut. Some spaceman has already sent tweets from space before him, but Chris Hadfield has fueled social networks on a regular and abundant way since starting their mission on December 19.The interest aroused by the public for Chris Hadfield made him the most famous astronaut after American Neil Armstrong, the first man to have been on the moon.
HELP ME.. I'M french and I dont know if its good:((

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The success of this video shows the popularity gained by him, like no other astronaut. Some spaceman has already sent tweets from space before him, but Chris Hadfield has fueled social networks on a regular and abundant way since starting their mission on December 19.The interest aroused by the public for Chris Hadfield made him the most famous astronaut after American Neil Armstrong, the first man to have been on the moon.
HELP ME.. I'M french and I dont know if its good:((

anonymous · Answer

Fist off, "The success of this video shows the popularity gained by him, like no other astronaut." has some problems

anonymous · Answer

who is 'him' that you are referring to? You need to make it so the reader understands. Where you say, "...by him, like no other astronaut." what are you trying to say? It kinda makes the reader confused. make it more clear.

english · Answer

Chris hadfield

anonymous · Answer

yeah I kinda got that...you just got to make it more clear. Instead of referring to him

english · Answer

and like no other astronaut, is like : he gained popularity like no other astronaut..I dont know if you understand:P

anonymous · Answer

I don't appreciate the sarcasm...lol. It just makes it weird when you put it in the writing like you did. I would make better understood (depending on your audience). I would also take out the part where you said, "American Neil Armstrong, the first man to have been on the moon." the part where it says he was the first on the moon I think has no need. Unless your readers no nothing of American history there is no need to say he was the first on the moon

anonymous · Answer

*know

english · Answer

So what I have to write to not have sarcasm?

anonymous · Answer

no I was joking about sarcasm...let me write the whole thing how I maybe would write it

english · Answer

Okay thank you!! You're very cool `<3

anonymous · Answer

it might take a little time so...

english · Answer

Oky i'll wait

english · Answer

tic toc :(

anonymous · Answer

yeah sorry I am trying to make it in a way that makes more sense...lol. I am almost done

english · Answer

okay thanks :) I was wondering If you don't forgot me haha

anonymous · Answer

Chris Hadfield, undoubtedly one of the most famous astronauts in history; can be seen in his abundantly successful career provided to us by the given video. There are examples of where astronauts have broken down barriers in history in their one respects, but Chris seems to have gone the extra mile by fueling social networks in abundance since the time of his launch in December 19. After countless successes Chris Hadfield undoubtedly earned the title of one of the most prestigious astronauts in history accompanied with the American astronaut Neil Armstrong.

anonymous · Answer

there might be some grammar mistakes but at least I hope to have given you some more ideas or help on finishing your assignment. Let me know hen you get your grade and how much you used of my work so I know how good you get graded. I just like seeing if I really helped or not;)

anonymous · Answer

*when

english · Answer

Thanks you very much :)!! and yes I will let you know :))

anonymous · Answer

does it sound better to you?

english · Answer

Yeah I think!! Its betteer than what I wrote haha. Last question:In June 2013, he announced his retirement of CSA as of July 3, 2013 to meet new challenges.  Does it sound good?