Can someone please edit my paragraph?? Please!?

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anonymous · Answer

1. I am a hard worker, I try every day to do everything that is within my power in order to succeed and to help those that surround me. 2. Despite my shyness, I am a friendly person who is willing to help anyone in need. 3. Volunteering and personal experiences has taught me to cherish and appreciate the people and things that are in my life. 4. Most importantly, my experiences, past, present, and future, will help me make in a change in the community-a change that will inspire the next generation. 5. My dedication and hard-work will help me be a Longhorn!

anonymous · Answer

Try not to tell to much of what you do, SHOW NOT TELL. So i would focus on a certain event that happened in your life and expand on that.