I know that my question doesn't belong here but can you just help me.

Is my transition good ?

Besides he never thought that his name is awful until Barry comments on it. Moreover Barry never stops picking on Ishmael from then.

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I know that my question doesn't belong here but can you just help me.

Is my transition good ?

Besides he never thought that his name is awful until Barry comments on it. Moreover Barry never stops picking on Ishmael from then.

unklerhaukus · Answer

translation?

anonymous · Answer

yep, Beside and Moreover is my transition

unklerhaukus · Answer

the tense is odd

anonymous · Answer

There are significant grammatical errors.

anonymous · Answer

So any ideas ?

anonymous · Answer

my essay is due tomorrow so I'm a bit nervous

unklerhaukus · Answer

its weird to start with the word `Besides` , what is the context ?

anonymous · Answer

How does this sound to you? : "Besides, he never thinks his name is awful until Barry comments on it." Hmm. Context would be nice. I'm not sure from what point of view you're trying to write this.