Question

SOMEONE PLEASE REVISE THIS PARAGRAPH FOR ME



So you see women have always truly been the stronger sex mentally and emotionally by coming as far they have even though they have to face the domestic offences, rapes, and child abuse ect. Women will always have to face these human right issues because of their enormous progression in life. But women are being abused and disrespected all over the world. This human rights issue should have ended long way before it ever started because everyone is equal from men to women, Blacks to white to all the other million races in the world. Whether you’

Answer 1

@hartnn

Answer 2

and emotionally by coming as far they have, <- add a comma

Answer 3

change this -> domestic offences, rapes, and child abuse ect.
-> domestic offenses, rapes, child abuse, and etc.

Answer 4

maybe you can change this sentence: But women are being abused and disrespected all over the world.
to this -> Women are still abused and disrespected everyday in many places all around the world.

Answer 5

thank you

Answer 6

no problem :)