I'm writing a thesis statement for a persuasive argument but i'm stuck. (I'll write it down straight away!) "To build awareness on dog fighting will greatly prevent the cruelty it causes and it will finally restore a breeds reputation, the Pit Bull" How can i make it appear to be more smooth than awkward? I feel like i'm chasing my tail.

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I'm writing a thesis statement for a persuasive argument but i'm stuck. (I'll write it down straight away!)

"To build awareness on dog fighting will greatly prevent the cruelty it causes and it will finally restore a breeds reputation, the Pit Bull"

How can i make it appear to be more smooth than awkward?

I feel like i'm chasing my tail. <(0_0)>

anonymous · Answer

Establishing the facts of dog fighting will help to reduce cruelty in the sport and rehabilitate the Pit Bull's reputation.

anonymous · Answer

Thank you! :) i ended up with a finely smooth thesis statement with the help of my teacher, so yay! :)