Question

Help with few inconsistencies and grammatical errors in my stories-

Answer 1

GUILTY FEEL
My knees suddenly banged on the wooded floor. Feeling guilty that I have killed the man for no reason. That the man’s heart was still beating alive. Is he still alive or is it another beating of sort of a living organism? The police kept staring at me with horror and I didn’t careless about what would they do to me. All I cared about is that I have killed a living man. “What have I done!” I foamed. “I didn’t mean to end a life of the old man.” The policeman looked at me, “where is the old man’s body?” they murmured. I started to ponder of what to do. I thought he was dead, Until he walked past me. He told the cops “ am right here and there's no need to be worried. The police said “alright, looks like our jobs done.” Good They left. Why were you trying to KILL ME? Its because of your horrible eye. Why didn't you tell me earlier that you felt that way, so I could apply for Obama healthcare plans and get a surgical procedure. Am sorry it's just that I didn't want to offend you in anyway! I thought it would hurt you deeply inside, so I'd rather take a step to be free from it and not hurt you in a way. You are one crazy person. Am not a lady who would cry over small stuff like that. If i were a lady....go ahead and kill me. I'd love you for that, because I know how women are. Next time if you want to do something like that....PLEASE do let me know. You don't want to get yourself into a hot mess with jail time! Am really sorry about what happened. I shouldn't have kept it to myself. I learned my lesson. Are we good now? Yes..yes we are. Lets go watch some TV. Why not? sure.

Answer 2

MISTAKEN
My knees suddenly banged on the spaceship floor. Feeling guilty that I have killed the man for no reason. That the man’s heart was still beating alive. Is he still alive or is it just me hearing stuff. The police kept staring at me from the camera with horror and I didn’t careless about what would they do to me when I return. All I cared about is that I have killed a living man. “What have I done!” I foamed. “I didn’t mean to end a life of the old man.” I thought I had a fake knife in my hand and it turned out to be REAL. I was pretending to knife hem like a serial killer, but I think someone has set this whole thing up. The policeman looked at me, “where is the old man’s body?” they murmured. I started to ponder of what to do. I thought he was dead, Until he showed up next to me. He told the cops “ am right here and there's no need to be worried, whatever he said was the truth. He was panicking when he found out that I fell on the floor with blood on me. The police said “alright, don't forget to aid hem. I will investigate this case of who replaced it with a real knife when you return from space. Okay sir, good day says the injured person. Here ill help you out by getting the first aid kit. Are we both good? Yeah sure. Am really sorry about what happened! Will figure out together who replaced the fake one with the real one.

Answer 3

My knees suddenly banged on the wooden floor. Feeling guilty that I have killed a man for no reason. That the man’s heart was still beating alive.
Is he still alive or is it another beating of some sort of living organism?
The police kept staring at me, there faces lit up like they were caught in the middle of a horror movie. I did not care about what they would do to me.
All I cared about is that I have killed a living man. “What have I done?” I foamed. “I didn’t mean to end a life of the old man.”
The policeman looked at me, “Where is the body?” they murmured. I started to think of what I should do.
I knew he was dead. But then he walked past me. My heart was racing so fast that i thought it would pound its way out of my chest.
He had told the cops “I am right here. There is no need to be worried. Im alright." The police replied in shock of what they are seeing “Well this sure is awkward. But it looks like our jobs done.” Then the police officers got back into their cars and left.
Good they left. "Why were you trying to KILL ME?" The man asked.
"Its because of your horrible eye."
"Why didn't you tell me earlier that you felt that way, so I could apply for Obama Healthcare plans and get a surgical procedure.?" He replied i couldn't stop staring at his eye, i wonder if he noticed.
"I am sorry it's just that I didn't want to offend you in anyway. I thought it would hurt you deeply inside. So I'd rather take a step to be free from it and not hurt you in any way."
"You are one crazy person. I am not a lady who would cry over small stuff like that. If i were a lady then go ahead and kill me. I'd love you for that because I know how women are. Next time if you want to do something like that....PLEASE do let me know. You don't want to get yourself into a hot mess with jail time!" He yelled at me very sternly i think he noticed.
"I am really sorry about what happened. I shouldn't have kept it to myself. I learned my lesson. Are we good now?"
He stood there staring at me. He was most likely thinking of what to say.
"Yes..yes we are. Lets go watch some TV hows that sound?"
I jumped up in excitement.
"That sounds great."

Answer 4

thats the first one edited.

Answer 5

thank youuu so much! could u also correct the other one! and yeah ill give u a medal for that :)

Answer 6

i'll try. but its not going to be perfect. what grade is this? is this for school?

Answer 7

its all good better then nothing right? :). its 9th and yesss.

Answer 8

My knees suddenly hit on the spaceship floor. Feeling guilty that I have killed a man for no reason. That the man’s heart was still beating alive.
Is he still alive or is it just me hearing stuff.
The police were continually staring at me from the camera.
Their faces lit up with horror.
I don't care about what they will do to me when I return. All I care about is the fact that I have killed a once living man “
What have I done!” I foamed. “I didn’t mean to end a life of a man.”
I could have swore that I had a fake knife in my hand.
I was pretending to knife him like a serial killer. I wasn't meaning for anything to happen. I was starting to think that i was being framed.
The policeman looked at me, “where is the body?” they murmured.
I started to ponder of what to do.
I thought he was dead. But then he was right there, standing next to me talking to the cops. He was telling them that everything was alright and there is no need to be worried.
The police said “Alright but don't forget to aid him. I will investigate this case of who replaced it with a real knife when you return from space"
"Okay sir, good day" said the injured person.
"Here ill help you out by getting the first aid kit." i reached for the kit.
"Are we both good?" i asked not knowing what to expect.
"Yeah sure." He replied.
"I am really sorry about what happened! And I'll figure out who replaced the fake knife with the real one." I said hoping that what I was saying is really true.

Answer 9

thankkk youuuuuuu:)

Answer 10

Sure girl :)