Question

Help me improv my short play.

Answer 1

Characters:
Jane: 7 year old girl, daughter of Frank
Frank: 45 year old man, strong, protective
Jeanette. 27 year old woman, martial arts fighter
Tim: 21 year old, awkward.
Ern: 34 year old, hostile.

Settings: Zombie apocalypse

Scene 1 setting: Safety bunker

Jane: Is it almost time to go, dad?

Frank: No, not yet dear. We'll probably wait here for another hour or so. We'll be here until the sun sets.

Jane: Okay dad


Jeanatte: I say we go now. Those things can't go too fast. We'd be gone before they even got to smell us.

Tim: No way! No way we leave now. I say we leave in two hours.. maybe three… Infact, maybe never! We are perfectly fine here. We can, uh, grab a pint and wait till it all blows over, right? Does anyone know what I'm quoting?

-All characters glare at tim-

Tim: Okay then… but actually, don't you guys thing its a little risky to leave? How do we know where we are going is safe?

Frank: Well, in theory we don't, but it'll be a slow death if we stay in here.

-Jane whimpers-

Jeanette: Hey now.. No need to be so incredibly blunt… dad…

Frank: -looks sympathetically down at Jane- I'm sorry, dear, but i'm being truthful we can't stay here now. Things have gotten bad, and I don't know if people are going to come and help us, okay? We are going to have to help ourselves, right?

Jane: I know…

Frank: Now, what I want you to do is pack all of the cans in this duffle bag, can you do that?

Jane: I can do that.

Tim: What can I do?

Frank: -glares at Tim- You can just stand there and look pretty.

Tim: Come on…

Jeanette: Why don't you look at this map and try to find the best route for us to navigate down, pretty boy? -hands tim a map of OK-

Tim: right, okay.

-Frank and Jeanette go into separate room-

Frank: You think we can make it? -packing a multitude of hunting guns-

Jeanette: Yes, absolutely.

Frank: Do you feel like expanding at all?

Jeanette: Well, from what I've seen, they're all extremely slow, and seemingly clueless. When we move through the dark, I'm going to hope that they don't sense us, and if they do we have all this machinery and this… -pulls out katana, smiles eviley-

Frank: Are you being serious?

Jeanettte: -looks offended- Yes! Of course! This bad boy can behead anything. I know we haven't exactly had the opportunity to get to know each other, but i know my ways around these sort of things.

Frank: Well, if you insist.

-Tim interputs conversation-

Tim: I think I've got the best route… we can review it if you want… and Jane is done packing our food. Its about to be sundown.

Frank: Alright, well we're about ready to go too.

-all enter main room, where Jane watches out the window-

Frank: We're about ready to go, Jane. What do you see out there?

Jane: Ive seen like, two zombies. Are you sure its going to be safe? We don't even have a car.

Jeanette: Yes, dear. We will all make sure you are safe.

-All exist through bunker-

Scene 2:

Frank: -holding Jane's hand- I don't see any, I suppose the coast is clear. Where are we off to?

Tim: We'll walk down 45th street, for a couple blocks, then take a left on Lucas street, until we hit IH-24.

Jeanette: God I hope you're taking us down the right route.

Tim: It absolutely is!

Frank: Please stop bickering, we need to focus.

Tim: I'm just saying it IS the right rou---

-gets cut off by the sound of slow groaning-

Tim: Uhm.. guys… -points at zombie heading towards them-

Jeanette: Finally! A chance to use this. -Pulls out katana and beheads zombie-

-Jane screams-

Frank: -quickly covers Jane's mouth- baby, you can't do that! I know its very scary but--

-gets cut off by the sound of multiple groans-

-a multitude of zombies turn around the corner-

Tim: We have to go, now!

-Frank picks up jane all run quickly and jumps into abandon car-

Jeanette: We're going to have to wait here until this herd passes, they won't notice we're in here.

Jane: Im scared..

Frank: I know baby, but we're going to get there safely, its going to be okay.

Jane: we're hiding in an old car from zombies….

Frank: I know.. but..

-gets cut off by tim-

Tim: I think they've all past now.

Jeanette: Well get out an look, why don't you?

Tim: What? No way I--

-everyone glaring at Tim-

Tim: Fine… -gets out of car- Yeah, they've past. Lets get a move on.

Jeanette: Alright, lets go, and lets try to be a little bit more… stealthy this time, aye?

Frank: Its not her fault, you really should explain yourself before doing something gruesome like that.

-Jane stares at Frank and kneels down to Jane-

Jeanette: Jane, I know this is all very scary, but my sword is going to protect us. To kill the monsters we have to get them in the head, okay? Is that okay?

-Jane nods-

Jeanette: Great. -stares sarcastically at Frank-

Frank: Come on, lets go. We need to get to the highway soon. From there I'm sure we'll find a car that has some old keys in it.. In fact we could probably keep looking around for some now…

Tim: Guys, is that a light over there? Should we check it out?

Jeanette: Other survivors! We should.

Frank: Im not too sure thats a hot idea.

Jeanette: Its boiling point idea, i think. The more survivors the better.

-All walk to the convince store with lights within-

Jeanette: Hello?! -bangs on store glass- Anyone in there?!

Tim: What are you doing?! Be more qui--

-gets cut off-

Ern: Everyone drop their weapons.

-to be continued-

Answer 2

Sounds good :P

Answer 3

Agreed but... Jeanette seems very smart for her age. I suggest Ern says the third line since she is hostile and rather murder the zombies than wait out here with awkward tim

Answer 4

Nice , I liked it :)