helppp!!!????!! please!!! In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. Make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. Use correct spelling and grammar.

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anonymous · Answer

It could be improved by adding more details about the events, and changing the structure. This si good, but needs improving.

anonymous · Answer

okay thanks @FlvsGirl

anonymous · Answer

Your welcome

anonymous · Answer

I am sorry I wasted both of our time. Have a good day.

anonymous · Answer

You shouldn't have been rude after I posted the paragrph

anonymous · Answer

I was going to help, sorry you didn't want it.