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hello i wrote this critical essay could anyone help me make it better?

Arthur’s life seems to get worse as his team loses and how his summer vacation got ruined because he as to retake English class.
The film Hoop dreams is about two young boys who want to become NBA players, but as they work toward that goal they meet with struggles and difficulties. Arthur and William do not understand that they cannot just dream about something and accomplish it. They both think that becoming professional basketball players will make them happy, but in the end they realized that there is more to creati