Question

I know this is math but can someone read over my essay and tell me any errors. Its for a scholarship so it will sound kinda cheesy

Answer 1

Which superhero or villain would you want to changes places with for a day and why

Answer 2

If I were to exchange places with a Hero/Villian, I'd be Batman. Batman is probably the most realitic Super Hero out there; well made by DC Comics. Batman is just an ordinary human, living an infamous life whose acts speak louder then others. Batman aka Bruce Wayne, did'nt live a life of luxury. Despite the money he has inherited, he had to achieve his goals through hard work and detemination. He strived to achieve a figure of human perfection. He may have his high technology but he trained extensively mastering detective skills, martial arts, and criminal psychology unlike so many others who may have had powers already. Despite Batmans inhumane ways of combat and sense of multiple personas, he can be viewed as a true role model and a paragon of excellence.

Living in his shoes for just one day would a be a unattainable privledge and opportunity. I'd stand tall with pride, no powers but strength, logic, and perseverance.

Answer 3

thats all i have so far...

Answer 4

You have quite a few grammar errors. Revise those first.

Answer 5

where are they all at cause the scholarship site doesn't tell where errors are

Answer 6

There's an English group.

Answer 7

i know.... no one has replied to it yet, i also put in literature but still none

Answer 8

1. did'nt
2. I don't think hero and villain would be capitalized.
3. You need to look over places to remove and add commas, such as:

"He may have his high technology but he trained extensively mastering detective skills, martial arts, and criminal psychology unlike so many others who may have had powers already."

Put a comma before "but" and probably after "psychology".

4. Your information is mostly about Batman's background. What is it that he currently does that interests you?

Answer 9

5. privledge

Answer 10

thank you but all in all does this essay seem good?

Answer 11

I'd say that you need to revise your information for your essay to be pretty good, especially for a college. If you want to be Batman, you have to show why you are interested in what he currently does more than his background.

Answer 12

alright got yeah, thank you for your help!

Answer 13

You're welcome!