Question

HELP NEEDED!
Can you make the beginning of my paper sound better? It's about the media and how they edit people in magazines to look thinner, give them better hair ect. and how it leads to mental illnesses!

I want it to flow and make people go "aye, I wanna read this!" this is the basic I got down..

What some people don’t know is that the beautiful, and flawless skinned women and muscular six packed men are all put through editing.

Medal will be given to person who helps me and will also acquire a loyal fan [:

Answer 1

Lol i ♥ ur username haha

Answer 2

i also <3 your username

Answer 3

Same here lol

Answer 4

Purple sparkles? How many sparkles are there? lol

Answer 5

haha i cant stop laughing omg

Answer 6

@GodGirl how to make the hearts you just made

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hold alt and 3

Answer 8

guyyss ;w; I just seriously want to graduaaate. I need heeelppp

Answer 9

@purplesparkles

Answer 10

@IJustWantToGraduate Lol ok ok Uh im srry but i suck at writting papers :(

Answer 11

so do i

Answer 12

I wish i would've thought of that username like seriously lol