Question

can anybody plz check my short story i have to add 200 words can anybody plz help?!

Answer 1

@wio

Answer 2

@iambatman

Answer 3

Okay, add a hallucination scene where the father said she is born to be queen

Answer 4

ok..

Answer 5

where do i write it ?

Answer 6

```
The third day I woke up cheerfully I dreamt that I saw my parents, and that we had
barbeque together. Following I told my grandma my dream she was surprised but still we
both knew there was something missing.
```

Expand this dream sequence into something more epic.

Answer 7

You need 200 more words right?

Answer 8

yes

Answer 9

She also encouraged me by telling me “you’ll be the star “and as my father added “you’re born to be queen “At an unexpected moment I stopped hearing

is that ok?

Answer 10

Yeah, but we are trying to get more words right? We're not trying to say it as quickly as possible.

Answer 11

What sort of things does a queen do?

Answer 12

loyal

Answer 13

loyal?

Answer 14

Okay suppose you are the dad and you want to make your child feel special, what would you say? You really just gonna say 'queen' and end it at that?

Answer 15

no
i would say that to be who u are and never give up for somthing you want to do

Answer 16

Okay put that, but put a bit more into like...

Answer 17

Talk about how there will be challenges, but I believe in you etc.

Answer 18

what do u mean by i believe in you

Answer 19

You don't understand what 'believe in someone' means? It means you believe they will fulfil the goal

Answer 20

. She also encouraged me by telling me “you’ll be the star “and as my father added “you’re born to be queen and never give up for something you want to do, it’s a challenge and I believe in you “

Answer 21

how can i expand the dream i really dont have any ideas?

Answer 22

Ummm, how many words is it now?

Answer 23

1337 it has to be 1500

Answer 24

1337 is a lucky number!

Answer 25

really?

Answer 26

Um, is English your native language?

Answer 27

no arabic

Answer 28

Int he beginning you should try to explain why the character likes piano

Answer 29

i really dont why? do u have any ideas?

Answer 30

Ummm, maybe they saw someone else play piano and got inspired

Answer 31

happened today during music class and that my New Year resolution came true in addition that bullying has stopped and the class apologized to me, my grandma had an enthusiastic expression all day, and playing the piano was a great way of releasing anger, tension and sadness ,which made my day become the best day ever I wished that my parents were there but we can’t change the past we ought to think about are future.

Answer 32

it became 1350

Answer 33

is it good?

Answer 34

It is fine

Answer 35

I have go to, good luck.

Answer 36

:( bye