Question

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Look at this thing I found. What do yall think about it?????



STORY IDEA: YOUR DOOR BELL RINGS AND ITS A PERSON FROM AN ALTERNATE UNIVERSE “I JUST WANT YOU TO KNOW THAT YOU ARE MY FAVORITE BOOK CHARACTER AND I KNOW HOW IT ENDS AND I WANNA CHANGE IT”

Answer 1

Here is a rough draft:

"Your favorite chair is next to the fireplace that is burning fresh wood. The weather is stormy and gloomy. You are wrapped up in a blanket sitting on the chair, feeling the warmth of the fire on your face. The light shone from the fire and from the window by the door is just enough to read your book. You start sipping your tea and reading while the fire burns, cracking and cackling. About an hour passes by and you are reaching a climax in the story when you hear a knock at the door. You set down your book and grab your jacket that has been warmed by the heat of the fire. You turn away from the fireplace, quickly looking to your left and right. To the left you see that it is still cloudy and to your right are shelves full of books that complete your collection. You hear a knock again and quickly head for the door. You make it out to the long and wide hall; you make your way to the giant heavy door that was handcrafted by 100 men. Reaching the entrance to your mansion the door opens and the wood masterpiece creaks. Standing there is a young, tall person whose face is lit up like a christmas tree.

“Hello. How can I help you?” You say, observing the tall figure.

“Hello! I just want you to know I’m from an alternate universe and you are my favorite book character in this story. I know how it ends and I want to change it.” figure says, pale as can be and drenched by the storm that passed moments ago.”

Remember, it is just a rough draft. Let me know if you want me to continue it in my asks.

Answer 2

Looks great!

Answer 3

Here, I updated it it. Tell me which one is better

Answer 4

Her favorite chair is next to the fireplace that is burning fresh wood. "The weather is stormy and gloomy, perfect for reading a good book." she thought as she wrapped herself in a warm blanket and sat on the chair. Gwendeline felt the warmth of the fire on her face and the breeze coming in from the window. The light shone from the fire and from the window by the door is just enough to read her book. Starting to sip her tea and reading while the fire burns, cracking and cackling, she enjoys the silence of her dark library. About an hour passes by and she is reaching a climax in the story when there was a knock at the door. Gwendeline set down her book and grabbed her jacket that was warm from the heat of the fire. Turning away from the fireplace, Gwendeline looked to her left and right. To the left she sees that it is still cloudy and to her right, shelves full of books that complete the collection. Hearing a knock again she quickly heads for the door, stumbling over her own feet. Making it out to the long and wide hall she ran towards the giant heavy door that was handcrafted by 100 wood carvers. Reaching the entrance to her mansion the door opens and the wood masterpiece creaks. Standing there is a young, tall person whose face is lit up like a christmas tree.

“Hello. How can I help you?” Gwendeline says, observing the tall figure.

“Hello! I just want you to know I’m from an alternate universe and you are my favorite book character in this story. I know how it ends and I want to change it.” figure says, pale as can be and drenched by the storm that passed moments ago.

Answer 5

@a1234

Answer 6

The second one is nicer.

Answer 7

I agree