Question

I was wondering if anyone would go over my essay and help me. I have major issues with punctuation and grammar

Answer 1

Ok tell me

Answer 2

I'll help

Answer 3

I found the hp chromebook 11. The hp chromebook runs at 279$, which would fit right into your budget. The ending cost would be 8,370$ which would leaves 11,630$ to get more stuff. You could get 30 more laptops so you could have two portable computer labs for the school. If you where to order the chromebook on the internet somewhere from a trusted dealer you could get it custom colored. This laptop is not to big but not to small I think it would be wonderful size. The chromebook doesnt way no more than two pounds.

Answer 4

The ending cost would be 8,370, which leaves 11,630 dollars to accumulate more supplies.

So added a comma after 8,370 and took out "would" and "to get more stuff"

Answer 5

1- put the sign $ before the amount
2- have less space between your words
3- after some opinion (this laptop is not to big...) put a ! mark to add feeling
4- the chromebook doesn't way much more/ any more than 2 pounds
Here's some

Answer 6

Also in english the teacher usually appreciates if you spell out the value (three hundred and sixty) instead of just putting a $360 amount.

Answer 7

Added comas and wrong use of the word to it's too
You could get 30 more laptops, so
This laptop is not too big, but

Answer 8

so do you think she would perfer me to write out all the numbers?

Answer 9

Yeah

Answer 10

is the chromebook 11 ok?

Answer 11

or do i need to spell out 11

Answer 12

Um better safe than sorry so spell that out too :)

Answer 13

ok

Answer 14

Yep

Answer 15

im pretty sure i got everything u guys said

Answer 16

I found the hp chromebook eleven. The hp chromebook runs at two hundred seventy nine, which would fit right into your budget. The ending cost would be eight thousand three hundred seventy , which would leaves eleven thousand six hundred thirty to accumulate more supplies. You could get thirty more laptops, so you could have two portable computer labs for the school. If you where to order the chromebook on the internet somewhere from a trusted dealer you could get it custom colored. This laptop is not to big, but not to small I think it would be wonderful size. The chromebook doesnt way no more than two pounds.

Answer 17

But leave instead if leaves

Answer 18

When you spell out the numerical values you need to relate it to "dollars" or else you could be talking about the pound. two-hundred seventy nine dollars :) Same goes with all the other values :D

Answer 19

oh ok

Answer 20

I found the hp chromebook eleven. The hp chromebook runs at two hundred seventy nine dollars, which would fit right into your budget. The ending cost would be eight thousand three hundred seventy dollars , which would leave eleven thousand six hundred thirty dollars to accumulate more supplies. You could get thirty more laptops, so you could have two portable computer labs for the school. If you where to order the chromebook on the internet somewhere from a trusted dealer you could get it custom colored. This laptop is not to big, but not to small I think it would be wonderful size. The chromebook doesnt way no more than two pounds.

Answer 21

look better now?

Answer 22

Great :)

Answer 23

adter but not to small should there be a period?

Answer 24

This laptop is not too big, but not too small; it's the perfect size.
Or something like that.

Answer 25

ok

Answer 26

I found the hp chromebook eleven. The hp chromebook runs at two hundred seventy nine dollars, which would fit right into your budget. The ending cost would be eight thousand three hundred seventy dollars , which would leave eleven thousand six hundred thirty dollars to accumulate more supplies. You could get thirty more laptops, so you could have two portable computer labs for the school. If you where to order the chromebook on the internet somewhere from a trusted dealer you could get it custom colored. This laptop is not to big, but not to small; Its the perfect size. The chromebook doesn't weigh no more than two pounds.

Answer 27

The last sentence, the statement "no more than" is incorrect grammar

The chrome book doesn't weigh more than two pounds.

Answer 28

ok thank u