Question

Ay Y'all please check this poem I wrote. Tell me what you think. Thanks y'all!!!

Answer 1

SCARS
I'm so alone
I'm so scared
I'm so lost
The scars
They haunt me
I wish I could remove them
But it is the mark the world has put on me
The pain can"t show
No one can ever know the pain I'm in
I will never be the same
I just want someone to love me
Scars cover my body
No one will ever love me
I must live with this
I must face the facts
It is hard
Depression sets in
You cry everyday
Nothing will matter
One cut wont phase you
Two cut
Three cut
Four
Nothing will stop you
You spill blood
Till the end
No one cries
No one talks
They never noticed you in pain

-Snow Elizibeth

Answer 2

EXIT
We sit...
We wait...
What next...
The lights flicker., like a horror film...
What now...
Lost in the shadows of my past...
News is never what I wanted...
Not this...My heart is breaking...
*Live*Laugh*Love*
None of these exist anymore...
Live- No life to be lived...
Laugh- No joy yet to be experienced...
Love- I've never been in love before...

-Snow Elizibeth

Answer 3

LULLABYE
Safe and sound
Live happy, Live free
Away from all harms way
In the arms of an angel
You rest, Your eyes
In my arms, I hold you tight
Live free of fear
Live safe and sound
Live happy and proud
Rest my angel, Rest

-Snow Elizibeth

Answer 4

@linda3 @HelpBlahBlahBlah

Answer 5

they are very good poems :)

Answer 6

Thanks :)

Answer 7

yw :)

Answer 8

You made me depressed.... :'( Write a happy poem... lol but it's really good! It captures a lot of emotion, here's a happy poem to brighten this thread lol

The sun is rising from the mountain peek
The wind is bristling through the tress
The birds of the the air are singing
and all the creatures of the earth
are rising up from sleep

Do you hear
The call of good morning
echoing through the streets
Do you see
the children playing
with a laughter of good beat
Do you feel
the good day coming
with all the hopes of joy to meet

I haven't finished but it's supposed to be a number in a musical lol >.<

Answer 9

Wow great job ! @SnowCrystal 3 medals for 3 Amazing poems =')

Answer 10

I am not so good with "happy poems". I write about a lot of love and mystery and death and loss.

Answer 11

Thanks @ElizabethS

Answer 12

well then it's perfect! :) It's your strong point and not everyone can write what you write- so never stop. :)

Answer 13

Thank you Linda :)

Answer 14

Sometimes its hard to write what I write because it has truth to it...or is based off my life or a loved ones life.

Answer 15

And @linda3 Lovely Poem... I just LOVE the way it Rhymes =')

Answer 16

yeah that can be very hard @SnowCrystal and you were gifted with this talent to share your story to the world! :) @ElizabethS ahaha thank you so much! - darn it now i want to post a poem but i don't want to close my question.... tough decision lol

Answer 17

:) Thank you @linda3 you are a great poet and a wonderful help :)

Answer 18

I really like it!

Answer 19

Thanks :)

Answer 20

They sound great! Love the last one. Good job snow crystal (:

Answer 21

Thank you

Answer 22

@Marco,Phillip

Answer 23

Hun just like always you are a awesome poet. Every time I read you poem i thing of the past and what is to come. I love knowing that this is your past only because i know how you are to this minute. You have over come the past and problems even if you have thoughts you are still doing good because they are only thought and not actions. God has given you the talent to let you write poem and let others read them. You are the best sweetheart.

Answer 24

Omg Pj your so sweet. I think I might just cry :')

Answer 25

To me when I read your poems it makes some relize what life could be like and the need to be blessed for how great life is to them

Answer 26

Aweeeee

Answer 27

:)

Answer 28

These are really great poems! I like how they are!!! Write whatever you want because you are amazing at what you do!!!

Answer 29

thank you :)

Answer 30

I love them all. you did a fantastic job!

Answer 31

Thanks here is one I just finished writing

I swear your just a dream
I try to prove you wrong
I'm dreamin'
When I wake you won't be there
But your always there...
How did you find me? Why me?
I bring back the pain to convince myself your not real...
But nothing is working...
I must see that your real
To believe this dream
I'm living in

It's just a dream
I bring back more pain to wake up
But nothing is waking me up
It must be real
But how?
How is this all real?
Help me please!?!...
It can't be real
I can't love again...
I'm scared to love again...
I don't want hurt...
They all say they wont
But they lie a thousand lies
This is just a dream

I must wake up
I will get hurt...
Or
Wont I?
I am lost
I need a light to guide my way
My light is you
You help me
Your there
You don't leave
You don't care I'm deaf
That I'm sick
You want to be there
Your smart
Talented
You must just be
A dream
A guy like you
Doesn't exist
Or...
Do they but....
Only in few and far between?
I don't understand
The pain in my chest...
Tells me this isn't
Just a dream

-Snow Elizibeth

Answer 32

It is called JUST A DREAM

Answer 33

@SnowCrystal ... the first one called, "Scars" is a bit scary. Hopefully you weren't inspired by that out of first hand experience.

I liked the lullabye but Exit was weird to read. Also I did not read the last one as it was way too long for my interest. (Hint: I hate poetry) However, you are really good at it I wish I had the talent when I was in 6th grade but oh well.

Answer 34

^_^ thanks but.... unfortunately with Scars I have experience myself... it's been a tough road for me the past 13yrs of my life... Now has been the 1st time I have been comfortable talking about my past and what I went through. @MathLegend thanks for the input it means a great deal even if you don't enjoy poetry :) thank you.

Answer 35

@CrazyCountryGirl

Answer 36

I LOVE THEM! I'M GLAD I HAVE A FRIEND LIKE YOU! IF YOU EVER WANNA TALK JUST EMAIL ME! :P SORRY ABOUT THE CAPS, THE BUTTON KEEPS GETTING STUCK. :)

Answer 37

CAN YOU MAKE ME A SHORT POEM THAT I CAN PUT ON MY WALL? :)

Answer 38

Yes I certainly can do my darnedest to. What kinda poem would ya like?

Answer 39

:) anything for a friend

Answer 40

:) Um.... Seething about being....Unique? Maybe different? .....

Answer 41

I do most of my poetry while listing to music. What is your favorite song?

Answer 42

That or send me a playlist of music and I will work with it on Monday cuz I have a thing im goin to tommarrow

Answer 43

OK do you want me to send it by email? :)

Answer 44

sure Email or via pm but Email might work easier for me. my email is kenziejroark@gmail.com

Answer 45

email me with ur username as the subject so ik it is u

Answer 46

OK :)

Answer 47

I must run I have a busy day ahead of me. I have Prayer Blitz at noon and I must do chores before breakfast at 5am tata fair well my friend

Answer 48

before you go can you check out my new bio? :) @SnowCrystal

Answer 49

yes i can

Answer 50

Awe thanks Kat :)

Answer 51

Wow! You are really talented. But as MathLegend said, "I did not read the last one as it was way too long for my interest." And the rest were Awesome! But i feel as if you really are depressed/worried. Are you okay? Just asking.. (;

Answer 52

Thank you @secret66 I think so? but idk anymore it has been a rough 13yrs. pm me please

Answer 53

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Answer 54

@JAMIE<3you @darkest_midnight
can yall tell me what u think bout the last one ik it long but please read it

Answer 55

it sounds really amazing

Answer 56

^_^ thanks i think u know who it is about

Answer 57

i think so to but not positive

Answer 58

your are right

Answer 59

These are incredible. Poems of love loss and tragety. <3 Wish the meaning behind a few weren't such a looked down apon subject.

Answer 60

Thank you :) And yes i agree with you

Answer 61

gr8

Answer 62

thanks :)

Answer 63

You're a great writer, and i can tell it helps you to sort your emotions. yet you seem so sad. the poems really moved me. especially the first one. nothing is wrong with being sad. but just dont let it control you. im sorry if i seem really cliche in what i am writing. but continue to use writing the way you do. from experience, i know it helps! i hope all goes well for you, dear :)

Answer 64

This Poem Explains My Life Lol, But Good Job!!

Answer 65

Wow, these are excellent! You are a very good writer.
I think you captured the emotions very well in all of these.
The first one was probably my favorite- really sad, but I could relate to it very well.
xx

Answer 66

:) thank you very much @ShoeyStylinson

Answer 67

thank you @quirkymalik and @ILoveMyIphone

Answer 68

not a problem

Answer 69

No Problem Beautiful :)

Answer 70

^_^