Hey guys. So I'm creating a synthesis essay for my AP Lang class and have to come up with a topic, my teacher says my 'introduction' or topic is on point, but needs some fine tuning. Can you help?

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anonymous · Answer

Social Security (a primarily Old-Age, Survivors and Disability insurance) has been under attack recently for its outdated structure and lack of revenue, with many fearing that the social program will soon collapse. Some have considered privatizing the Federal Act in an effort to boost reliability and curtailing the program’s end.

dumbsearch2 · Answer

What is wrong about it? I think it's extremely well-writen !!!