Question

Hey guys, so i wrote these song lyrics and i know they may not be good... but this is the first 'song' that I've ever written. So thanks. c:

Answer 1

The life,
It was never right anyways,
I just wanted to get away,
I didn't want to be here anymore,
Open up the door and let me in,
You were never the perfect guy,
But you're the only one that seemed right,
For me,
Baby.
Let me in,
Close the door,
Just sit and listen,
To whats happened,
I was there,
I screamed out,
Why'd this happen to the perfect person,
Baby.
Take me away,
And let me stay,
Here forever,
In you're arms,
Lets get away.

Answer 2

They seem nice :D

Answer 3

I think you need more.

Answer 4

I give your song credit for making sense, a lot of the songs I see on here don't. It just needs like a whole nother section.

Answer 5

I have my own melody running threw my head but I'd like to see yours. You should post a video of yourself singing it.

Answer 6

I agree with him :) It's a goo start! Just add a bit more like for example--

In your arms,
Let's get away,
To a secret place,
and speak the words we could never say...

I hoped I helped a little?

Answer 7

Its good!