I was wondering if this was a good opening paragraph to my essay?
Basically I have to write an essay of how both John Muir and William Wordsworth admire nature

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I was wondering if this was a good opening paragraph to my essay? 
Basically I have to write an essay of how both John Muir and William Wordsworth admire nature

jacobbenvenutty · Answer

“In every walk with Nature one receives far more than he seeks.” - John Muir
Nature does not only show the beauty of the Earth, but it shows the beauty within us. So then, is it not easy to say that both of these authors have great beauty within them. After reading both “Calypso Borealis,” -John Muir and “I Wandered Lonely as a Cloud” -William Wordsworth, I can boldly state that with their loving choice of diction, tone, and use of syntax they clearly show that they truly admire nature and their surroundings. After reading this essay, I hope that you too can have the same emotions on nature that these men have made me feel.

anonymous · Answer

I thinks its good but, the ending with "After reading this essay" is kind of something you would put in 3rd grade if you didn't know what else to right about to finish the paragraph.