Question

Just wrote a chorus for a song to be haha
opinions?

Yes I'm still alive
But I'm barely breathing
And you've got me on my knees begging
to take me away
and finish the job
cuz I don't deserve them anymore
So I greet you with open arms
my love

Answer 1

its cute lol its funny to

Answer 2

i make it for a song just finish it

Answer 3

if you dont mind

Answer 4

of course

Answer 5

ok *writes it down*

Answer 6

i like it!

Answer 7

yeah it is cool

Answer 8

I like it. I'm curious about what the song is about, but I will give you some advice. You might want to change the first two lines

Yes I'm still alive
But I'm barely breathing

This is the beginning of Breakeven by The Script