Question

Medal/Fan
Can Someone look over my Debates Paper?
Any tips/comments would help!

It is on Cutting Military Funding, and my paper is For it. The rest is below. Thanks in advance! :D

Answer 1

Sure give me moment to read it

Answer 2

ok :D

Answer 3

I think it is very well written, and you give good detail, which ultimately results in a very persuasive argument. I can tell that you did a lot of research in order to bring up good facts and reasons to support your argument. I don't see any grammatical issues, and I definitely agree that the U.S. needs to stop spending so much on its military.

A++++ paper!!! Awesome job with writing!! :D

Answer 4

thanks! :D

Answer 5

Okay firstly
There's a typo in paragraph two. For not or.
Secondly your second paragraph was filled with bias filled opinions instead of data filled facts

Answer 6

this is a debate.....

Answer 7

and ok, i'll fix that :D

Answer 8

thanks to both of you! :D

Answer 9

and thanks to Destinymasha for coming and looking at my paper! :D

Answer 10

You're welcome!! :D
I wish you much luck with your future writing!!! o^.^o

Answer 11

thanks! :D