Can anyone read my Wattpad story it's an original "novel" by me I need feed back! It's not finished

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anonymous · Answer

http://www.wattpad.com/story/14294944-all-over-again

anonymous · Answer

The dialogue needs to be put in new lines li0ke:

"Hi," said Charles.
"Wassup man," said Mike

anonymous · Answer

Also indent new paragraphs.

anonymous · Answer

Thank you! I starting writing it like that but it looked like a fanfic or the way a journal is written but know that I know it's supposed to look like that I'll fix it!

anonymous · Answer

glad i could help

anonymous · Answer

Anything else that should be fixed?

anonymous · Answer

Also I don't know if you noticed but I have another book that has more chapters if you have anytime I would love feed back on that one too!