Question

May some one please read my poem for school, and give advise.

Answer 1

Just You and I
I was alone for some time.
No one to talk to,
But you were there
Just you and I.

I was hurt,
I was in pain,
No not physical,
But it still felt the same,
But you were there
Just you and I.

I tried to stop the tears
But pain would not stop scratching on the doors of my eyes.
But you were there
Just you and I.

When I thought I would allow death to come in,
When I saw that rope to be the only way
You were there
Just you and I.

When all I needed was a friend,
You were there
Just you and I.

When my light started to shine
When I realized all I needed was you,
You were there too

Answer 2

i like it its really sweet
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Answer 3

@robtobey @whpalmer4 @hartnn

Answer 4

@JayBaybie

Answer 5

I changed it a little.

Answer 6

I like it...Like iits what you showed me yesterday but you revised it ...I love it...Shoot you dont need my help hehe im jp:))I really,Really like it:))

Answer 7

ok thx

Answer 8

still having problems with the 8-6-8-6 one

Answer 9

Poetry is suppose to be from your heart and no one else tell you how to write it. I mean i could give you a million suggestions but then thats me writing not you. Poetry is you