Need help with my thesis statement

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venomblast · Answer

wait.. i changed it

venomblast · Answer

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mysangels · Answer

In your thesis statement,  you need to say what your essay is going to be about. Try that, then you can juicy it up afterwards.

venomblast · Answer

I really need help with the thesis. . i updated the paper btw

mysangels · Answer

Ok, but what are the sub topics for your main idea going to be
I. Thesis
     1.Subtopic 1
      2. Subtopic 2
And so on.......
It is much easier if you organize your paper some way, and this may help. In your thesis you sum up what the reader will find in your paper, which is why you need suptopics. Btw this is 2014, not 2015.

venomblast · Answer

sorry i was following ont he assignment that my professor want me to do

mysangels · Answer

so what do you want to say in your essay?