Question

PLEASE ANSWER! :)

This is part of a song I'm writing is it good? And by is it good I mean, are the lyrics good sounding together and is the singing good or since it's a sad song should it be a little more rougher sounding and not so soft and sweet.
I just started writing it I just need help with lyrics and the style. THAT'S ALL.

Tell me what you think please and thank you :)

https://soundcloud.com/theangelcaroll/kill-me-now-original-song

Answer 1

Depends on the taste from person to person. But if your looking to improve it then add chord progressions, harmonics,and bass lines. For example, if you wanted a more minor sound, a vii>iii>V>IV>(ii/I) progression works nicely, allowing room for a darker "deceptive Cadence" sound with a surprising touch of a lighter "Authentic Cadence". Next you would need a time keeping instrument to assure you don't rush or slow down, like a simple Bass arpeggio. Experiment with you music a bit, and remember that lyrics don't sell the song. To someone who recently came here from Japan, all i really hear naturally is the melody. I have to focus on the words to recognize them.

Answer 2

It was a nice tune but Kill me now before I die? is it a sad song? are you suffering? If you become a professional they will ask WHY you wrote you may want to write down WHY you wrote it :)

Answer 3

Duh it's sad, lol. But I just wrote it because I was frustrated. It's an oxymoron song, "kill me now waste your time, kill me now before I die" I'm not even finished with it

Answer 4

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=817EVmiR7qE I got the insperation from this song, this song curses though

Answer 5

I think it is a great song keep working on music!

Answer 6

I love it! It sorta sounds like sanctuary backwards from Kingdom hearts

Answer 7

I cant really understand the lyrics to your song at all so maybe write down the lyrics along with your singing or something, otherwise it sounds like a medieval based theme, kinda cool.

Answer 8

Lyrics:
Kill me now waste your time
Kill me now before I die
Kill me now you'll be helping me
Kill me now for eternity

Answer 9

I'm guessing its about someone hurting someone else because of love? It makes sense if that's your opening it's good.