Question

Can someone please look over my thesis statement and help me improve it?

Answer 1

sure were is it

Answer 2

Martin Luther King uses similes, rhetorical and imagery to influence his readers.

Answer 3

@ikatouni

Answer 4

First form an opinion on the topic. Write down one sentence that states this opinion.
Next either through research or knowledge write down the strongest reason supporting your opinion.
Then write down the second strongest reason supporting your opinion.
Finally, write down the main argument against your opinion.

With these three statements you can form a variety of thesis statements in various forms.
Even though, (argument against), (opinion) because (reason one) and (reason two).
OR
(Opinion) because (reason one or two).
OR
While (argument against), (strongest reason).
ETC.

So using your topic and just some made up reasons you might come up with something like:

Opinion: Pride is hurtful.
Reason 1: The bible says it is.
Reason 2: Pride leads to selfishness.
Argument against: Pride can improve ones self esteem.

Thesis: Even though pride can improve one's self esteem, pride is hurtful because the bible says it is and pride leads to selfishness.

Don't be afraid to tweak your statement or statements. Also don't be afraid to change your opinion. I have started a thesis on more than one occasion only to find my opinion changed during the formulation of my thesis statement. Don't let your opinion get you stuck

Answer 5

even with wat i said i honestly think ur statement is good @hernandezzz

Answer 6

@ikatouni thanks dude

Answer 7

no prob @hernandezzz can u press the blue rectangle next to my answer