Question

Can someone give me advice on my college application essay?

Answer 1

sure

Answer 2

How do you want me to send you the essay?

Answer 3

attach the file. Down in the comments.

Answer 4

What do you guys think?

Answer 5

There are some unnecessary repetition of words in your paragraphs. Colleges want to hear about how you overcame the challenges as well. I like it though, I can relate. :}