Question

My new poem: "Thought to be Done in the Mind"

Read it below.

Answer 1

In my new mind, I had a dream that I went back to old times. A time when a girl was blinded by her own beautiful hair.

Many were the strands of hair in her head, Many were the people that could count them.

Many were the times she covered her eyes with them, just to hide from others who really had them.

Many were the advises she got from others, so that she could get beautiful hair. Always was the times she ignored them, saying she has beautiful hair.

Many were the times she would shape each strand, trying to prove they were there, but never did she free herself and see, they are still a dream in her mind somewhere!

Answer 2

that's great..!

Answer 3

Thank you:)

Answer 4

In this poem, I am explaining what happens in the mind of a person who has a dream, but just continuously dreams about it instead of fulfilling it. Dreams are for doing.

Answer 5

dear i will suggest you thet break each line into samll pieces..then it looks sound perfect.......

Answer 6

Thank you @am!rah :)

Answer 7

Really?

Answer 8

I wrote this because now I am getting the idea that I should follow my dreams instead of just keeping them in my mind. All my poems come out because of my experiences, emotions, and thoughts.

Answer 9

I am glad to hear that my poems are relating to others too.

Answer 10

awwwwwweeeeeeeeeeeee this is so beautiful!!! OMGGG

Answer 11

Thank you, @Melodysim :)

Answer 12

welcome :))

Answer 13

I have broken down the lines to smaller pieces. Thanks for the advice, @zaibali.qasmi :)
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In my new mind, I had a dream that I went back to old times.
A time when a girl was blinded by her own beautiful hair.

Many were the strands of hair in her head,
Many were the people that could count them.

Many were the times she covered her eyes with them,
Just to hide from others who really had them.

Many were the advises she got from others, so that she could get beautiful hair.
Always was the times she ignored them, saying she has beautiful hair.

Many were the times she would shape each strand,
Trying to prove they were there,
But never did she free herself and see,
They are still a dream in her mind somewhere!

Answer 14

waaaahaa maja agaya sunke !!!! achaa hei :) all the best :)

Answer 15

Dhanya Vaad :)

Answer 16

Great job :)

Answer 17

Thank you:)

Answer 18

its perfect now...

Answer 19

I really enjoyed reading this and I think you broke up the stanzas just perfect. Very well done.

Answer 20

Thank you all.... :)

Answer 21

wowwww
It's superb!

Answer 22

Thank you @Brainybeauty :)

Answer 23

@HisOnlyForever ?

Answer 24

its really good ..!!! @quickstudent well done..!

Answer 25

Thank you:)

Answer 26

that's cute...i can imagine or picturise it...
` A time when a girl was blinded by her own beautiful hair.` ...... Very sweet line..packed with emotions....

Answer 27

Good job...!

Answer 28

Thanks, @Abhisar :)

Answer 29

u r improving with each of ur poem !

Answer 30

great!!!!
very nice.....keep it up

Answer 31

Thank you, Didi:)

Answer 32

Amazing!

Answer 33

Thank you:)