is this a good body paragraph
Finally, immigration border should stop deporting innocent people. People from other country need a better life. They need a better life because they don't have food to eat or pay the rent. some children they need to get out of their country because of the gang members. When I see the Tv people crossing the border it breaks my heart and I even pray for them

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is this a good body paragraph
Finally, immigration border should stop deporting innocent people. People from other country need a better life. They need a better life because they don't have food to eat or pay the rent. some children they need to get out of their country because of the gang members. When I see the Tv people crossing the border it breaks my heart and I even pray for them

anonymous · Answer

Honestly, I think your sentences are incomplete. You should also change some sentences around. For example, "When I watch TV and I see people trying to cross the border, it completely breaks my heart."

kohai · Answer

Also, this really repetitive: "...need a better life. They need a better life..." You could say, "...need a better life. This is because..."