Hey, I wrote a paper, would anyone care to proof read it and help me make it presentable? It's only a page long when using New TImes Roman font at size 12.

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anonymous · Answer

Hi, I could help with proof reading!

anonymous · Answer

Cool! Thank you! It's really bad in the last part, and I'm brain dead from it. It's too emotional to think clearly.

anonymous · Answer

This is really good! I just have a few things I noticed:
 '...when someone asks it's only acceptable to not simply', is this supposed to be nod? 
'I cried myself in fear to sleep.' You might want to change this to 'I cried myself to sleep from fear.' 
'ended up vomiting, this caused me to cry.' You should change 'this' to 'which'. 
'...a child doesn't handle fear well'. You probably want to put an 'and' in front of that.
'She would often be fine and like a light switch change her mood.' You should change this to 'and then, like a light switch, change her mood'.
'She got sick of me not doing well, despite my A's and B's, I would still struggle and not understand.' You probably want to separate this into two sentences. 'She got sick of me not doing well. Despite my A's and B's, I would still struggle and not understand.'
'When I joined back to public school in 7th grade' should be 'When I joined public school again in 7th grade.'
These are just some grammar things that will help the essay flow better. :)

anonymous · Answer

Oh, my goodness, thank you. =) Can you clearly see a point to my story? (My teacher will ask about that.)

anonymous · Answer

Yes. I can see you really struggled with things, but eventually you got back on track with the help of a good teacher and that teacher made a lasting impact which still helps you today.

anonymous · Answer

Wow I'm amazed. This is awesome!!