Question

What would be a really good thesis statement for this paragraph? I am correcting it.
Growing flowers is one of my happiest childhood memories. Gardening offers more than a way for kids to have fun. There are many things to gain from working with plants outside. It is unfortunate that many people feel too busy to garden. More people should take a chance with gardening to see what they can create. I am glad I learned to grow plants when I was a kid.

Answer 1

@kavonta

Answer 2

@micahm

Answer 3

do you want it edited

Answer 4

Here is what I have so far:
- Words like fun, happy, happiest, and glad can be turned into more advanced words from our vocabulary in 9th grade.
- There are to many periods, there needs to be a lot more commas rather than cutting the sentence off in the middle with a period.
- This paragraph is only stating that Gardening offers so much more than people know but it doesn't state what Gardening offers.
- When I read this, I kept asking myself "Why was it one of your happiest childhood memories?" or "What makes gardening so fun?"

Answer 5

So now I just need an idea for the thesis and attention grabber

Answer 6

ok so at the end you want some thing that would make me feel like gardening makes you happy because you get to watch the flowers grow and see how they adapt to the weather

or because growing flowers makes me happy cus it teachers me that the earth need the flowers to clean out the pollution


if what more i give give more info

Answer 7

Thank you so much! That is exactly what I need lol