Question

Rate my my writing.
*it may be childish but that what my teacher told me to write about* >.>

Answer 1

After a very important conversation with my mom about my child hood, we came up with an object that we both remember very cleary. It was my very first bicycle ever. My memory told me that I got it when I was eight but my mom insisted that I was seven when I first received it. Neither of us had a proof, and so we both decided that when I got it was irrelevant.

My mom recalled that the bicycle was the smallest he could find. I remember how gigantic it was to me back then, but now it looked relatively small. I was so afraid of it and there was no way that I was going to control that giant red piece of metal! The bicycle remained in my backyard as a decoration for a month because I refused to ride it. I was just to afraid, but then came the day. The day when I finally had the guts to ride it. That sensation I felt when the wind blew in my face for the first time was like no other. At the end of the day it took 5 try's, and several Band-Aids, before I could ride a bike perfectly. When it was all over I was proud of myself and so was my mom.

Answer 2

" Neither of us had a proof, and so we both decided that when I got it was irrelevant. " take out that "and"
"My mom recalled that the bicycle was the smallest he could find. " shouldnt it be "she"
" I was just to afraid, but then came the day." im not really good with revising, but i think you should change this, maybe to "I was so afraid till the right day came" or "
"The day when I finally had the guts to ride it." nothing about it, but SO CUTE XD

other than that....SO DAM CUTE AND ADORABLE XD <3 lel goo job brah ;o

Answer 3

@Walkerman15 lel

Answer 4

I'm here

Answer 5

OMG THAT IS SO ADORABLE JOEL <333333333333333

Answer 6

IKR!??!?!?? lol the whole time im reading it just saying AWWWWW out loud xD
goo job boss <3 xD

Answer 7

Cool Stroy Bro..

Answer 8

@thesmartone lol man xD its so dam adorable <3 i love to hear stories from lil kids, so dam cute n adorable xD

Answer 9

What grade are you in? @Joel_the_boss

Answer 10

@TheSmartOne Im in tenth grade my teacher told us to write this lol

Answer 11

@fateal Im not a little kid >.>

Answer 12

XD lol It was adorable tho.

Answer 13

@Joel_the_boss lol ik xD but its so cute xD

Answer 14

Ok

Answer 15

Agreed @fateal =^.^=

Answer 16

if i didnt know that boss was in high school id say he's the cutest kid ever xD

Answer 17

His cuter than any guy I've ever seen

Answer 18

awww xD lol so cute xD

Answer 19

What is?

Answer 20

I kind of don't see what is so cute... It is just an essay he had to write...

Answer 21

@TheSmartOne its so adorable, the words he used xD
" I remember how gigantic it was to me back then, but now it looked relatively small. " SO ADORABLE XD

Answer 22

AGREED XD

Answer 23

>.> I regret posting this @Walkerman15 @fateal ;-;

Answer 24

too late <3 xDi feel so bad, but cant stop laughing :')

Answer 25

IKR FATE

Answer 26

O_O IM NOT A KID!! lol @Walkerman15 @fateal

Answer 27

Ik I never called you one that was Fate

Answer 28

I just like the way you wrote it

Answer 29

:) I know Katie your better that fateal @Walkerman15 @fateal jk lol

Answer 30

lol

Answer 31

sorry.... cant think, sorry boss ;o
didnt mean it that way, when i have bart baker on i go on cray high mood n talk cray 'o.o

Answer 32

lel idc what u guys call me tbh :P

Answer 33

BRB my bro wants me to make him food ;-;

Answer 34

lol I wish my sister would make ne food...

Answer 35

I only read this part http://prntscr.com/4tn4c3 and got super happy than I read this part http://prntscr.com/4tn4j6

Answer 36

@Walkerman15 You both are awesome to me ;-;

Answer 37

@TheSmartOne is just watching this little dispute xD

Answer 38

Ok XD that made mt day so far

Answer 39

Ikr @Joel_the_boss

Answer 40

XD

Answer 41

awww xD im sorry @Walkerman15
and @Joel_the_boss lol if u were my bro then sure id make u food xD